It's A Long Walk
Back To The House
Broken poem, no
sense to the signs or the fence,
the rusted barb wire
strips still connected
to the posts -
and far away
you've hung your last name
and all those pewter
goblets.
I'm to think vital
thoughts and make a speech
in two days while you
hang yourself, hooked up
like sheets in the prairie wind
and fading, warble.
October 5, 2014 1:15 PM
I utilized all twelve words provided in Wordle 181 in Brenda Warren's Sunday Whirl
I love the shock of the ending. Nicely wordled. Your images are strong.
ReplyDeleteIt twer November
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when she came to me
twer November bouts
when she left
no sence with it
just up an gone
no reason for it
lests I can tell
like one of those
sitcoms the Johnsons
rave on about
twer November then
tiz october now
was a long time back
Wander
Intriguing, that's the word...
ReplyDeleteHello!
ReplyDeleteLove your ending, the last four lines. Complete
Quite a feat, working all those words in!
ReplyDeleteEvocative and chilling...
ReplyDeleteOh no not a hanging! Delightfully wild use of those words slipping nicely into a spine chilling Magpie.
ReplyDelete"Hanging like sheets in the prairie wind" I love that line. Everything was powerful and written with intent.
ReplyDeleteI see that speech blowing on the sheets hanging on the line...tricky things keep moving so you can't write it down
ReplyDeleteThank you everyone. Comments or no. I do like telling little stories that almost make sense. *chuckling*
ReplyDeletevery good with it's dark ending
ReplyDeleteI do have one observation though. I never thought of "hanging" on a barb wire fence as a fatal situation in this poem. Sometimes you tear your skin as I did behind my knee one time in West Texas as a second grader. Hanging a person with barbed wire by the neck would indeed be nasty, but this picture is of a woman hung on a barb wire fence and she is unlikely to die or even wound herself very much. It is really easy to hang yourself on barbed wire without dying.
ReplyDeleteYou detailed a movie in my mind. Well done.
ReplyDeleteInteresting. I kind of had a movie in mind when I wrote.
DeleteOH MY, this was really great!!
ReplyDeleteAmazing. I so rarely get signals that someone is combing through the archive. Thank you.
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