Sunday, April 7, 2013

What Could Have Been - A Magpie Tale

Woman With a Towel, 1898, Edgar Degas
Offered by Tess as the prompt for Mag 163

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What Could Have Been

When you told me this
all my worlds took wing, and me
rising into clouds
trying to speak words
worth saying at such a time.
Since that one moment
distinct in my life
I often stand near as you
step out from your bath,
watching your womb grow
beyond our embrace of love,
beyond all we were.

April 7, 2013 12:41 PM


  1. Thank you for visiting my blog .. yes, the first thing I noticed was the woman's belly.

  2. Pleasing and somewhat endearing...

  3. I love the ending of the poem, a lovely wrap-up.

  4. A tender little moment...aaah...

  5. I don't have words.....

    I am truly amazed how that painting has taken us venturing into new paths...

    paint me in many hues, not just black

    1. You are right about the path being new. Only in poetry. I have no child, yet I can sense the presence of a pregnant and gravid lover, the warmth and all that attends the warmth, as she stands fresh from the bath and welcomes my presence. I have no doubt that my senses have that memory though I have never had that lover.

  6. I was going to ask if this moment was real. My BFF is with child. I'm all over that belly :)

    1. Actually it is not true that I have never had a pregnant lover. I have never had a late stage pregnant lover. My lover was briefly with me and pregnant by someone else. I apparently treated her so well that she named her baby boy after me even though I was not the father. His first name was a marriage of my first and last name. I am Christopher Hileman. He was named Chrisman. So she told me long after our time together.

  7. A such a lovely tale for a woman in waiting for her child!

    1. Karen, what a nice thing to say! It's what I hope for.

  8. Beautiful =) I also very much enjoyed the story of your name

  9. I love all the different takes on this prompt. I wrote from the perspective of a man watching a woman without her knowledge and wondering about her! I love your take on this... lovely!


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