Sunday, April 20, 2014

A Spring Outing

Image offered by Tess for this week's Mag 216,
painting by George F. Mobley, Finland, 1968

A Spring Outing

My water was twice
stolen, taken from the bridge,
both to seed sharp clouds
and flush the steel sink.

My sway aches more than my bones.

It is raining hard.
The air is rocking.
It's all open to my mess
and many wee folk
perch on the lowest
limb of the freaked out birch tree
so I shiver bricks.

‎April ‎20, ‎2014 6:58 AM

Written as a Magpie Tale
Also written to include the 13 words in Wordle 157

Wordle 157 by Brenda Warren

30 comments:

  1. There is a real pace and drive to this piece...effortless and emotive..like being inside that picture

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    1. Thank you for your thoughtful reply, Jae. It's a kind one too.

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  2. fascinating imagery with your words.

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    1. There' something that happens with wordles to me.

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  3. Love the movement and motion in your words. Makes it feel like the image looks, if that makes sense!

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    1. Remember how some people say the words take over when you tell a story and the story tells itself?

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  4. Doesn't seem like a all too pleasant outing!

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    1. Well I guess an outing in the rain is not so much fun, is it love? I had to work all day in the rain more than one time. Ick.

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  5. haha! This made my chuckle run deep. Thank you for feeding the fantastical.

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    1. Wordles seldom let me stay in the mundane. That is really hard to do and tell a story and keep the flow moving at its own pace too.

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  6. Dead good fun, loved the last line.

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    1. Me too. Total serendipity. That line wrote itself after I worked a bit to make room for it.

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    2. i love your reply to this.....like you were trying to fit in an old( shivering) friend!!

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  7. "My sway aches more than my bones." Even aspirin wont help that, I'm afraid.

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    1. NSAIDS are very dangerous for the likes of me. To say that is not me in my happy place. Just another sign I am no longer who I used to be.

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  8. "Shiver bricks"...what a fascinating line...this is beautiful as always Christopher!

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  9. I've never shivered bricks before. Interesting piece.

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  10. Serenity of life's goodness can be adverse. Hoping everything's going ok! Nicely Christopher!

    Hank

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  11. Thank you, all. I trust if Easter is in your realm that you had a grand time. I highly recommend that you shiver bricks if you never have before but never ever on pain of serious regret shudder bricks.

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  12. I like the creator image nudging his or her way through this piece laughing at mankind. Mind you I could be bonkers thinking that!

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    1. Well... I guess the creator in this one is quite mad, so it's not you :D

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  13. Oh yes, you speak of truth, and shivering bricks is so real to life!

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  14. Well done. My favorite line:

    "My sway aches more than my bones."

    =)

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  15. My sway aches more than my bones...oh I love that...

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The chicken crossed the road. That's poultry in motion.


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