Sunday, June 16, 2013

I Shall Dare To Pray - A Magpie Tale

The Promenade, 1918, by Marc Chagall
Image offered by Tess for this week's writing prompt on Mag 173.

I Shall Dare To Pray

I would pray you to
come back to earth if I thought
it would do any
good - if you ever
listened to me anyhow.

There you are floating
along sideways just
barely touching my outstretched
uncertainty, just
about to depart
forever into lala
voh deeoh doh dum
.

I'm in the green sea
of my old hesitation
and suggest you doubt
my wide post war grin.

June 16, 2013 10:16 AM

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14 comments:

  1. ... 'forever into lala voh deeoh doh dum'~~ from an old hippie? This is priceless!

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    1. Actually comes modified from a reminiscence of a song "Listen To The Children" I used to sing in choir about the conflict in Bosnia and what it did to the innocents.

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    1. That's how I think of myself, somewhat unpredictably wise :D

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  3. Reading this brought to mind another blogger with whom I am in touch.

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    1. All my life I have been familiar to people who just now meet me in some one or another context. It's one of the minor mysteries of my life.

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  4. "...barely touching my outstretched uncertainty" ...oh I love! And that wide post-war grin!

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    1. People will mask their true face for many reasons.

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  5. the green sea of my old hesitation...what a thought.

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    1. How else to describe the undulations beneath the man?

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  6. Oh, your words resonate with me so deeply.

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  7. "outstretched uncertainty" is awesome!

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    1. It's a clue, no? "widespread nematodes of error", "underground sniveling", "his faltering saturnine wince", "snaggle toothed philosophy" and so on...

      Try it yourself but use it somewhat sparingly. In this poem I crossed the metaphor twice and it is perhaps one too many.

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The chicken crossed the road. That's poultry in motion.


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