tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2377252801421681569.post6339202724581736877..comments2023-10-28T04:53:32.505-07:00Comments on View From The Northern Wall: Trying It Againchristopherhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04201537517464996231noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2377252801421681569.post-38161619622326874552014-05-17T09:29:31.969-07:002014-05-17T09:29:31.969-07:00I've taken direction and made a small change i...I've taken direction and made a small change in the second verse. Thank you, Yousei.christopherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04201537517464996231noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2377252801421681569.post-42331480232629546312014-05-16T16:00:58.986-07:002014-05-16T16:00:58.986-07:00I love the way the two portions contrast and compl...I love the way the two portions contrast and compliment...and this spoke to me as I have planting on my mind and kissing! :) Excellent poem!Hannahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10124956200834969600noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2377252801421681569.post-16904884375163866222014-05-16T05:02:46.273-07:002014-05-16T05:02:46.273-07:00I like it! Just as Debi said, they play off each ...I like it! Just as Debi said, they play off each other. Perhaps a single word in the second which references/echoes something in the first would make that synergy even stronger. Thank you so much for including your process notes. I really enjoy those.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2377252801421681569.post-63235723772854519392014-05-15T20:00:49.203-07:002014-05-15T20:00:49.203-07:00I like this... the first stanza is a good symbol f...I like this... the first stanza is a good symbol for the second. Your condensing two into one works perfectly. Debi Swimhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08255928985823418669noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2377252801421681569.post-23359994341122461772014-05-15T17:45:28.332-07:002014-05-15T17:45:28.332-07:00Tis a good poem, Christopher.
You're much lik...Tis a good poem, Christopher. <br />You're much like me. When I revision a poem I find that the old is just a step-off point for the new because I'm coming from a different place.irenehttp://orangeisafruit.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.com